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The cat who would fly (Free verse) by nentwined

Tearing the paper of my face, otherwise so placid--thoughts of a past that's not yet happened; where my kitten frolics, just a memory of this frail thing in front of me; she coughs and pushes towards me, threading her claws through the air; life and death really are this simple.

Shuushin 12-Aug-05/1:01 PM
I very much like the ending - I think maybe too many small words pull the punch a bit.




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