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A Good Man Ruined (Free verse) by Dovina

Working alone, the ace engineer gets it down. Like an artist of few mistakes, he conceives, births practical designs, buildable, awesome. Promoted and monied, he runs a team and thinks he can run the world. Off for himself now, fumbling, failing, fanatical, driving nails in what he could have designed, still unaware. It's the fault of a woman draftsman, he's told, but he knows it's his own damn fault.

zodiac 29-Jul-05/4:07 AM
That's not what I'm saying. I'm saying IF you wrote it for yourself, it's great (if a little overexposed). IF you didn't, I don't think it works. Saying I wrote this for people who think like me is the same as saying I wrote this for myself.

I don't think it's a necessarily unhealthy realisation, but the way I think it would be healthy is not the way it's set up in the poem.




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