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a love not meant to be (Free verse) by nentwined

one coil at a time, apologies loop higher; a steady spiral--progress, a mix of liquid hope and concrete fears combed together, a smooth surface; a jug that I fill with love and offer to you ignoring the cracked and leaking base

nentwined 28-Jul-05/7:33 AM
Hmm. Good question.

Perhaps it could have been, but it was rushed to the kiln with too much attention paid to the "now" of the coils, not enough of the base. The combing is applying a comb to the coils (it's meant to be a coil pot) to smooth the edges together and make a flat surface out of an inherently ridged one.

I'll try to give it some more serious thought when I wake up. :)

Thanks!




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