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When my place is placeless (Other) by Prince of Void

My heart is pathless When my place is placeless Where the play of Romeo and Juliet happens endlessly In the front of my eyes Within shapeless character of modern man Keep trying to be tearless But it’s no longer let me be fearless The characters are changed days by days The circle of plays open to seize me again As the role of hamlet in the sea can’t be doubtless Where uncertainty makes rules for restless waves of future And then I am king Lear in the misjudgment became useless Dooms run thorough leaden land of Macbeth Turning into that role with agonies of past Despairingly stand at the age of kingdom Being faithless as the dawn of tomorrow is dead After thousands tomorrows And turning into thousand roles One role at the end is to see the unseen Drinking wine with The One Understand the unfathomable love As I feel nowhere else could be Or could I be beyond the being Could I be beyond the context of existence and universe? All life could be a play Now it’s finished Now I am taking my pace toward exit To the exit of all roles

Dovina 11-Jul-05/11:30 AM
The first two lines get off to an irritating start because they imply a connection that is not there or not developed. You have not started from where the reader is.




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