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Endurance (Free verse) by Dovina

She made him a necklace of paper birds, each with a song and a smile, placed it on him with a kiss, like bread upon the water. Two regrets she now endures: the necklace scratched his throat, and she had chosen one wrong sentence— a kind of pain she’d never not known.

Dovina 11-Jul-05/11:17 AM
In what way is it not good? Please do not spare my tender feelings in your answer. I listen to all comments, and believe it or not, incorporate many of them. Here I have not done the things you usually find offensive - preaching, explaining, using funny grammar. So, what?




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