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mental collides (Free verse) by nentwined

I woke up on this day (like any other day) with not a drizzle (of suspicion) clouding my sky; the mist was in (real, wet) but I was not afeared... (not afeared yet). I set about my (simple) tasks -- I won't describe ('less someone asks) ... let's just say nothing (all that) complicated. not yet. The complexity of (simple things) entwining (their simple designs): my life (a collection of) simple strings (come a ball of yarn) being tossed around (by kittens). With a momentary reprieve (balance granted) I might (just might) be able to grasp (the tiger's tail) and begin the climb (one string at a time) to its head. not yet.

LilMsLadyPoet 11-Jul-05/7:54 AM
This made me chuckle...clever. I am undecided about the ending "not yet." Not sure if I would have put that in or dropped it.
I love your style...how format follows the thought trippingly along...I just love it! (and I can be quite a critical _itch!)LOL.




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