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Gratitude (Free verse) by Dovina

On summer hills, a heavy bull eats brittle brown grass, and every bite tastes good. I see it in his face and wonder if he remembers the green blades of winter, or finds a duty of the living to pleasure in what the dead cannot, a gratitude for the running and mating that made this small pleasure possible.

Shuushin 30-Jun-05/10:30 AM
"eats" is a weak descriptor - lost opportunity at best.

Might want to tell me what it is you saw in his face that convinced you how he found the grass to be tastey.

Conceptually, there is a wide range of things the living can do that the dead cannot - I have trouble pulling a subset of that from the grazing, running and matings of a cow.

I think you can do it - but not by just telling me to.




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