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The Object of the Game (Free verse) by Dovina

He wallows in hurt of women who wronged him of lovers so shallow they stab him on whims and leave the very next morning Ignoring their words and their wounds he finds others to love and be hurt by They tell him why all this is but he’d rather suffer than listen He’d rather ignore their multiplied pain While holding his treasure close

Joshua_Tree 28-Jun-05/4:07 PM
Sorry, I wasn't clear at all. You did a great job of understanding the situation and an admirable job of expressing it. It's like a photograph - crisp and clear with the capabilities and limitations of that medium - and very good as an artistic photograph. End of discussion on this poem.

What I think you could do superbly in a different poem is paint a picture of a moment or an almalgamation of the scenes that led to your conclusions. For example, are there items, odors, bits of dialog that illustrate his wallowing in hurt? That, too, would make a superb poem.




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