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The Object of the Game (Free verse) by Dovina

He wallows in hurt of women who wronged him of lovers so shallow they stab him on whims and leave the very next morning Ignoring their words and their wounds he finds others to love and be hurt by They tell him why all this is but he’d rather suffer than listen He’d rather ignore their multiplied pain While holding his treasure close

Joshua_Tree 28-Jun-05/11:44 AM
Nice piñata, abuelita. I think the ending works well. As long as it's about him, that's the most evocative ending you're likely to find while dealing concretely with the issue. It's an important approach and you improved on your excellent effort from before, earning well the 10 I promised.

I'd also be curious about how you would approach this issue from a more abstract viewpoint. It's true that a man would think women are shallow if he never was available for intimacy, himself, but how would you illustrate it?

I especially like the title. "Game" has potential to evoke a whole spectrum of emotions, depending on the experience and training one has in relationships. It is apparent here that the primary meaning is that of a competition and protecting his 'treasure' is what the subject sees as the goal. That being so, attempts to explain that the game differs from his expectations fall on deaf ears.




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