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A Righteous Prayer (Free verse) by Dovina

Oh, God, Whom I enthrone Because You meet my needs Grant now my petitions For which I make claim I bring humbly before You All those lofty ideals I’ve kept With passion for religion As tools for advancement As Your Word admonishes I now beseech Not in prayer demanding But in humble knowing I ask in faith, believing Rejecting the hypocrites Who say with their platitudes You’ve outlived usefulness I shall not shrink from asking With a righteous heart From One who gives to those In whom He delights Amen

Dovina 27-Jun-05/11:47 AM
I would not say these things in ordinary conversation. But as you should have realized, this is a prayer and uses the language of prayer. But it's not an ordinary prayer, rather a use of prayer language to say things that would not be properly understood if said in the language of conversation. I don't want to spill the whole thing, but try to look at it from the viewpoint of someone who truly prays, and compare what this poem is saying to what such a person might pray, using only slight variations in wording.




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