Dovina24 Jun 2005
I think the grammar issue goes back to our disagreement on punctuation. I omit commas at the ends of lines, thinking a pause is inferred there, where you say they are needed. See how these sentences look grammically when the inferred commas are added.
"Grant now my petitions, for which I make claim."
"I bring humbly before You all those lofty ideals Iâve kept, with passion for religion, as tools for advancement."
"As Your Word admonishes, I now beseech, ..."
Granted, the grammar is a bit awkward for prose, but for poetry, I think it's acceptable.