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Father’s Day (Free verse) by Dovina

Let every man who ever had a father Consider: I knew a man who, when old, grew bitter when young, he forgave As he aged, he complained when young, content The older he got, the more he criticized when young, he encouraged When old he revealed his core

zodiac 23-Jun-05/12:45 AM
That's exactly what I'm saying. The point of the poem isn't that he can look at the bitterness, complaininess, and critical side of himself and change it (ie, avoid, in your words, "falling into a trap".) The point of your poem, whether you mean it or not, is that the bitterness, etc, IS his core and therefore unavoidable.

That's why I ask, how does one avoid one's "core"? Maybe it would be better to ask, Can one change one's "core"? And if he can, it's not much of a core, is it?

All this is kind of moot for me; I don't believe in cores. And I don't think you mean it the way I'm reading it. But I think that's why everyone's pissed about this one. I think they read it the same way.




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