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Nonsense POEM #14687 (Free verse) by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk

Whining elephant stands on a blue Line waiting for government cheese and Crackers to float up out of the swirling mist That obscures the vision of the beaver people climbing out of the primordial mud-huts of the Village Disjunct of the County Inarticulate This is the same dream I had when a Hamburger was eating me! Can I call you Malcontent? Yes you can, it's my name and has been such for so long I can't even remember when it wasn't shifting in and out of phase this laughing cactus wants a hug as the penguin waddles in his tuxedo and top hat towards the anchovy laden Sea port and sees shells on the beach avoiding the live crabs catching at my sand groovin' heels it's a scene, man... a real scene.

Nicholas Jones 20-Jun-05/6:52 AM
Dylan Thomas, even though he attended a famous surrealist convention in London with a teapot full of string offering to pour people a cuppa, always strongly maintained he was not a surrealist, because that involved using images from the subconscious directly without mediating them. He argued that, while he was happy to use such imagery, he had to artistically arrange them and make them fit his own poetic vision - he could not abide the sense of randomness inherent in true surrealism. And basically what you've done is to fall into the trap of bad surrealism, which is just to stick a load of images together without any thought for anything much.




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