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Father’s Day (Free verse) by Dovina

Let every man who ever had a father Consider: I knew a man who, when old, grew bitter when young, he forgave As he aged, he complained when young, content The older he got, the more he criticized when young, he encouraged When old he revealed his core

zodiac 20-Jun-05/5:46 AM
So many, in fact, that you're really not writing about men-in-general at all. You're just writing about a few guys and it's a shame you started the poem with "Let every man who ever had a father consider".

In short, I'm with everyone who says this doesn't track. Sure, most guys probably go through bitter periods (for me it'll be right around the time I realize I can't be a spaceman when I grow up) but get over it in time for a nice benevolent dotage. Right before they step out in front of the speeding bus.




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