Joshua_Tree19 Jun 2005

Line 8 began with "and" at one point. I cut it in one revision and forgot to replace it.

I think that I need a different 3 syllables before 'word' to make the reader feel more comfortable putting the stress on 'her.' If you read it in iambic, it make the emphasis that I wanted when I was in the middle of the TABS (Teenage Angst...), but I shouldn't have to rely on the reader to force the rhythm for me.