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A Message from my Dreams (Sonnet) by Joshua_Tree

I heard a plaintive message from my dreams, That they were lonely missing me, it seems. "Where have you been our friend, our one time friend." I felt a touch from one I knew as love, Who had at last been sent from God above To speak a new beginning from the end. I have a blessed vision from my muse, She directs me put away my blues - To paint the sun with dots of shining gold. I smell the sweet incense of romance burn And taste a wine so sweet I cannot turn. My troubled heart again to be made bold. A lover I have neither seen nor heard, My heart yet hangs on her every word.

DoubleU 19-Jun-05/6:47 AM
The frustrating thing about rhyming is that a lot of interesting and beautiful words cannot be used at the end of a line because they simply have no onomatopoeiac (?) equivalent. Unless you pull the alliteration trick (sort of fake rhyming). All you can do is stash those words away by changing the sentence structure. Which often results in a struggle with the conjugation of the verb. I think that's the reason why so many writers yield to prose-poetry. They also think that the contents, their story, offers all the poetry a reader needs. Ha!
You object to rhyming cliché's like Moon/June, but I'd rather see those lollipop words halfway through a line than lines full of so-called literary words that grate in sound. Matter of taste? I'm not so sure.




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