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Impeccable mess (Free verse) by sk8rs_rule_all

Dont forget me world, as I am lost in the darkness of you. I want to come out and play, but I am forever chained to the feelings of yesteryear. Get back into my heart, for I have lost you. I have lost my love in this impeccable mess of mine. I've lost my spot in line, the line of life. Dont give up what you have to get back there. I gave up what I had, just to get back here. Dont forget me world, as I am lost in the darkness of you. I want to come out and play, but I am forever chained to the feelings of yesteryear. I wont give up what I have to get back there again. The grass isn't always greener on the other side. I was slipping into an abyss of love and anger, and lost my way. I reach for the rope looking for a way out, and you pulled me through. Dont forget me world, as I am lost in the darkness of you. I want to come out and play, but I am forever chained to the feelings of yesteryear. Listen to your "friends" lying all around you, telling you things. They've ripped apart my heart, and have made you bleed out. You've bled yourself free of hate and anger. I was once torn, and you helped me.

DoubleU 18-Jun-05/10:48 AM
You really believe you've turned the text into a poem, Zodiac? You made reading easier, that's all. It's still a pile of boring platitudes. 'I reach for the rope, you pull me through', jesus.




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