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missing pieces (Free verse) by mystic enoch

I gave you my heart. You gave it back. Its all broken. Now I must fix this broken thing. I thought you were the one. Your thoughts werent the same. Some of the pieces are missing! Life is so unfair. Because I miss you. I dont know what to do now. (read my poem FOR THE LOVE OF JOEY. It came first in this story)

Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 17-Jun-05/11:38 PM
well. step 1. Use a thesaurus. Broken -- busted -- wrecked -- bent -- bruised -- mangled -- tortured -- trashed --...

but don't say.. "Its all broken. Now I must fix this broken thing." eww. yuck. and "it's all broken" is bad too. try.. "it's broken"..

"You have crushed it
now I must tend this
mangled vessel." --




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