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Rock and skin me (Free verse) by Figure 8

Rock and skin me. Reel me to the end, rock me naked and I will bend backwards for your camera eye. And the camera eyes for all who feast on my need. The never full dirty need I have down where it really matters. Inside my soul, outside my body. I work to pulse hard for all who eat my flesh and I smile as the eyes blink and one little tear is pushed forward from my heart.

LilMsLadyPoet 14-Jun-05/3:18 PM
This made me feel ill...it was repulsive to me, even though I am not entirely sure of what you are portraying here....and I have a feeling I don't want to know. I suspect "eyes"...in, "the camera eyes" means the camera eye IS, if so, it should be: "the camera eye's for all"....so on.




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