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Why? (Free verse) by windyone

Why? Do you always criticize because you can't cope? Do you feel better when you take away hope? Writing helps to set us free, it's not just for you,not just for me. Sometimes people are just starting out words can hurt and cut like a knife, be careful my friend to not add to their strife. You don't always know what others are going through, the way that they write is not up to you.

zodiac 10-Jun-05/11:52 PM
1) Don't assume we criticize because we can't cope. The truth is we all cope better than you, and the middle-school English teacher who told you people criticize because they can't cope couldn't cope.

2) re: "Do you feel better when you take away hope?
" Do you feel better being hopeless? A: Only if you can somehow stop every single person on the planet from pointing out how hopeless you are. Which I imagine involves stopping time itself.

3) Writing for onesself is fantastic. I, for one, would never criticize someone for writing all kinds of smarm for their own private purposes. You, however, are doing something extra. Can you tell what? (Hint: it involves the internet and a site called poemRANKER.)

4) Because you obviously want real criticism, here: Don't rhyme knife and life ever ever again.

5) Punctuate consistently. If you can't figure out how, write your whole poem out like it's prose, like a story, and see where you've forgotten periods, commas, and other such. (Hint: Check the ends of lines!)

6) Of course we know what you're going through. We were there. About 100 years ago. People gave us all hell then, too, just like we're doing for you. Those of us who didn't cut it are over at autobodymechanicranker.com. Check them out.

7) re: "the way that they write is not up to you." Oh. I thought you were posting here to get our opinions. Oh, I see: not that kind of opinion. Is this one better. This is the best poem I've ever read and you're obviously a beautiful, gentle soul I had exactly the same experience once.

8) You're thinking of going to my poem list and zeroing the first title you see there. Please, by all means, do. Join the Dark Side.

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