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Morning Dreams (Free verse) by ObiWonKn

Droplets of you Remain on my branches Dew in the morning The sunlight shines through Igniting your diamonds The sky remains your fortress You will never forsake your throne The way you have me As the moon takes the hand Of the evening?s brightest star They slow dance in perfect time, Gliding to the piano Still playing in my head Suddenly, I see you And it isn?t just a dream The stars are glitter Dancing through your hair The bitter taste of goodbye Is no longer there Just you

LilMsLadyPoet 8-Jun-05/9:39 PM
"Droplets of you
Remain on my branches
Dew in the morning
The sunlight
shines through"....I am stingy with the compliments...that said...awesome lines here! Of course, it sounds vaguely like me, but I can't claim you stole it (as I'd like to be able to), as I have yet to post here! LOL!

I also liked the last, very much!
"Suddenly, I see
you
And it isn't just a dream
The stars are glitter
Dancing through your
hair
The bitter taste of goodbye
Is no longer there
Just you

Very nice...will be snooping around to see what other morsels you have left lying about. I felt the middle sections were not of the same caliber as the favorite lines I just pointed out. I am giving you a fairly high score (in the way I have been voting), for the lines I mentioned above, and because, having only read a limited number of pieces, this one made me feel hope that I would find a gem among the rough.




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