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on my hog (Haiku) by nentwined

three chambered ka-booms two rocks sitting on pavement fly from my approach

nentwined 7-Jun-05/8:19 PM
I actually changed it from "two rocks sit on the pavement"

Hmm.

"fly from my approach" -> "they fly as I near"? Hmm.

See, I thought they were rocks, and it turned out they were birds.

I suppose I should sit on this one a bit more.




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