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-750,000 in Rwanda (Free verse) by ALChemy

See how the Tutsi sleep dead in heaps and still they lie there where they die. Too many for the census takers, calculators, estimators. Too many for the senses to take. Hear our silence serenade the merciless raid. The order's called. The triggers pulled. The flash, the bang, the flesh explodes. and in the air the smell still hangs of a rotting sweetness in churches and streets. wreaking our futures bleakness Touch the ground unsettled ground desecration abound There are more bodies than bullet shells stabbing children snapping thier necks. Save the bullets for mom and dad. Kids are easier to kill.

SupremeDreamer 7-Jun-05/3:58 PM
You'd be better off without these parts methinks-- tad pimpled and cliched bits:

"But in the air
the song still hangs
and justice floats
away in floods of blood.
Making rivers out of streets"

&

"Ask yourself.
What should we do?
What should be done?
Or be like the rest
and say fuck CNN.
and turn Baywatch back on."


That aside, here's a seven.




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