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Smoky Mountain High (Free verse) by Dovina

A river rolls along, slow in orange afternoon haze Sun rises a ball of red in Mississippi Valley Folks there hardly notice or think it strange when summer follows rain Meanwhile, for all those swollen bushes briars, brambles and weeds overwatered, drying fast on San Gabriel slopes likely come summer’s answer— hot pink evenings orange nighttime ridges lovely in firestorm glow when ashes of burned lives fall like rain and sun rises bloody, unfamiliar in yellow murk and we’ll not call it ebb or flow or rain’s result but think it strange

Dovina 6-Jun-05/2:44 PM
Summer has many answers to the extreme rains the mountains of Southern California have received this past winter. The answer I’m focusing on is the strong probability of wildfire. These mountains burn every 50 years on average, and this year, if a fire starts as the Santa Ana winds come hot and dry off the desert, the rain-swollen bushes will burn like a hell we have never seen.

The last line is for comparison with the first verse, but it may be rubbing an obvious comparison into the readers face. I am so often accused of not including enough information, and being unclear, that I put it in just to be sure.




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