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Smoky Mountain High (Free verse) by Dovina

A river rolls along, slow in orange afternoon haze Sun rises a ball of red in Mississippi Valley Folks there hardly notice or think it strange when summer follows rain Meanwhile, for all those swollen bushes briars, brambles and weeds overwatered, drying fast on San Gabriel slopes likely come summer’s answer— hot pink evenings orange nighttime ridges lovely in firestorm glow when ashes of burned lives fall like rain and sun rises bloody, unfamiliar in yellow murk and we’ll not call it ebb or flow or rain’s result but think it strange

Dan garcia-Black 6-Jun-05/8:52 AM
The real differnce between the first stanza and the second is what the people at each place are seeing. In the second stanza all of us in LA are watching the bloody, red sun on television. Who goes outside in LaLaLand before sunrise? Oh yeah, sanitation workers, hookers going home to shootup and go to sleep and cops. Personally, I Tivo the 6 AM news just to see the sun.




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