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Her Wildfire Addiction (Free verse) by molly

Her dirty fingers are magnets to the slender Marlboros. Her ashtray, full and black as tall as a child's sandcastle. When she sighs, she exhales and the ashes fly spreading across the carpet like a wildfire of bees attacking its prey without mercy. She thinks she's in Heaven-- She thinks she's killing time-- She thinks there ain't a worry in the world-- When she's got her cigarettes. Oh, Mama, Mama Do you love your cigarettes more than me? Oh, Mama, Mama It's not only *you* you're killing.

[mojo] 1-Sep-02/1:17 PM
Cigarette poems seem extremely popular and frankly i think this poem stinks. I'm very rarely hyper critical and will certainly read a selection of a poets work if i have a negative reaction to one of their pieces. I hope i like another piece better. The last stanza sounds like it was written by someone who does not use English as their first language. "Oh Mama"! .0.




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