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Slowing - or, A Love Poem with Eggs and Short Lines (Lyric) by zodiac

My love, she has astonishing ways of slowing, when the eggs are done and I'm bug-spas- ming in my skin - and who ever was who liked cold eggs? My love, she tips the change-dish off the curio, when she'd rather stay in she frets, she doffs her dress again or finds my lips not fast enough. She says, don't think me a fool for this; I know exactly what time it is.

DoubleU 1-Jun-05/5:24 AM
Closing lines:

'Don't think me a fool for this
she says
I know exactly what time it is.'

Unless you consider the two-line consistency a holy must?

'or find my lips
not fast enough. She says

don't think me a fool for this
I know exactly what time it is.'






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