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Coffined (Free verse) by Dovina

What good is a body coffined Or self-consumed As if the reaper sleeps? What good is legacy lost Or fund-lengthened lives For bullets’ sting? And why help For thanks returned More likely stabbed Sitting here Soul soured Before an empty tube Wine darkened In midnight verse Hard-faced to any need I ask what good that body is Complete, abolished No-breather, no-brainer

Dovina 26-May-05/6:42 PM
No, it is a failure as poem. Thanks for trying to interpret, but when four good poets fail to understand what I was talking about, it can only mean that I failed to be clear.

The body is complete because the life is complete. It is abolished because the life is gone, a no-breather because that leads to the punch word – no-brainrer – which has two meanings – a dead brain and a decision that requires little thought.




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