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Never Ending Cycle (Free verse) by ingwa

Small and plundering large and thundering strong and powerful white-toped and rolling Gales and breezes blow and turn never ending always moon affected cycle Blue-green walls the hand of God reaches surfers paradise a swimmers worst nightmare Beauty to the eye a great photograph too with still frame animation mists captured for eternity Rocks and cliffs you sculpt and erode changing the landscape on a continuous basis Tsunami and lapping shapes of all kinds distinctly familiar peaceful or raging Never ending it breaks upon the shoreline against the rock sprays a great ride for crabs

nentwined 24-May-05/4:33 PM
toped->topped, I presume?

surfers -> surfer's, maybe
swimmers -> swimmer's, definitely

still frame -> still-frame

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I think you might have an elegant image here, between the shredded lines. Still, it's somewhat generic; hard to rub a pearl out of it.




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