poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Never Ending Cycle by ingwa.

nentwined24 May 2005

toped->topped, I presume?

surfers -> surfer's, maybe
swimmers -> swimmer's, definitely

still frame -> still-frame

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I think you might have an elegant image here, between the shredded lines. Still, it's somewhat generic; hard to rub a pearl out of it.