DoubleU24 May 2005

This is an improvement over your other nature poems. It rambles here and there, like 'never ending' twice, well, I tried to change one into 'eternal' but it doesn't work and you've used 'eternity' already elsewhere.
The best poems about neverendings and eternities are in fact those that do not use these words...

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white topped and rolling. The problem with English is that it has many combiwords that call for a hyphen and they are quite ugly in poems.

Nice last line.