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A Night By The Shore (Ghazal) by Bhaskaryya

Lunar waves rise and fall upon shores 'neath the moon The night's air whispers ancient lores 'neath the moon Wild geese render light to all; a wanderer's boon The shrieking nocturnal preys and gores 'neath the moon Glowing embers upon the midnight skies festoon Tossed by wailing winds, the ocean roars 'neath the moon Silver light reflects upon a lonely lagoon Lost in tempest, a young seagull soars 'neath the moon A distant mast through storm; survival struggles goon From the bosom of clouds, drizzle pours 'neath the moon Music to Aashik's soul as gossamer winds croon Gently easing him of all life's chores 'neath the moon

Shuushin 22-May-05/9:22 AM
Lovely images and the repetition blends nicely without become washed out.

I'm not very familiar with the stories related to Aashik-e-Rasool, but surely this must do them justice.




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