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Homecoming (Free verse) by Dovina

I lie beside him in the bed and feel his breathing slow his years and gray still bright mine fading as the night Until his morning hand reaches and I’m gone nothing will have changed his mind at rest my body too Just a short walk an errand really yes, an errand Out the door down the stairs Why was it I left the bed? If I think only this well now and worse with time how can any other walk be love? It’s kinder now before the worst with sense to act his courage strong Del Mar Street still too close a few more blocks then stand and wait Can’t quite remember why I came or exactly where I am only that it’s time Those headlights yes, it’s time two quick steps the lights of home

Dovina 12-May-05/9:18 PM
I want neither to encourage suicide nor discourage it with this poem. And I want no double ending here. I have strong personal feelings against suicide, but this is not a poem about my feelings. Nor is it autobiographical. What I failed to communicate is that it is a story, a true story. I often think that if a subject is not close to me I can write rather succinctly about it, and that if the subject or the people in the story are close to me, then it muddles within my feelings and comes out wrong. So I think it has come out here. This is a powerful story about love and respect of an old woman who cannot tell it. I am not going to give up very soon in my effort to tell it for her. I appreciate your comments.




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