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Dying breed (Sonnet) by INTRANSIT

These rolling cowboys, map faced and gray down from the mountains of dawn they will snake stealing through night, burning through day ride ragged canyons against burbling brakes. Broken eared gargoyles that heavily brood the thatches and thaws of transporting goods cross bridges of thought that leave them undewed while weaving through leaves and unmarked woods. "Unskilled labor" the sign of the day signals undying thirst for rapport. A public not privy to docking ballets; drivers are losing a country's support. Marking their status with dutious time devotion to lifestyle; their only crime.

INTRANSIT 9-May-05/9:56 AM
DOH! Too bad it's not iambic. I tried to spondee while playing twister in a truckstop parking lot with some midgets. I kicked myself in the eye. Here are my problems with it: cross bridges of thought- is good but OF COURSE they're un-dewed. Bridges keep you out of the water, duh. And I think it's a bit of a leap to the closer, a chronic problem I seem to have. I appreciate your time though. Thanks!




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