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Go now if you want it. (Free verse) by Fayt

An otherworld awaits you Don't you give up on it You bite the hand that feeds you. All alone in cold fields you wander Memories of it cloud your sight Fills your dreams, disturbs your slumber Lost your way ... a fallen knight. Hold your aim steady An otherworld awaits you One thousand years ... you ready ? The otherworld it takes you. Go on into the sand and the dust in the sky Go now no better plan than to do or to die Free me, pray to the faith in the face of the light Feed me, fill me with sin and get ready to fight. Hope dies and you wander The otherworld it makes you Dreams they rip asunder The otherworld it hates you Free now ... ride up on it Up to the heights it takes you Go on if you want it An otherworld awaits you.

DoubleU 8-May-05/4:34 PM
What I regret in your poems (which get high ratings, I saw) is your 'hang-up' on certain themes: 'faith', 'darkness', 'otherworld'. It's like you are afraid we won't grasp that the poem is about Faith, Darkness or the Otherworld. Your gothics (and basically any kind of poem) would be enhanced if you sought alternatives to these words.
And again, I dislike those capitals all throughout quite a lot...




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