thepinkbunnyofdoom5 May 2005

Eh? It's long, and stops to really interest around the Religious remark. Really liked the following lines.

"The Lawyers that must at times, swim against the hem of the sea;
therefore
meaning public opinion."

There is controling your audience, and then there are failed attempts. This was a fairly good attempt. Like Alizarin_Crimson said a nice start, now trim it. Get to your point sooner, and if it's going to look this bulky, Reclassify it as a Prose Poem please.

<3 Jason