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fake (Free verse) by eliznhaz

I don't wanna be full of hostility for anyone but its to late Angry and abandon beatin and pushed around One day I'm just gonna break free from this fake smile And I'll show you just how fake this smile can be And i'll see if you again sit and laugh at me your life is whats nothing more then a joke to all that see

Dovina 3-May-05/2:29 PM
"to" should be "too."
"abandon" should be "abandoned."
"beatin" should be "beaten."
That's as far as I'm going.




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