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In the aspens (Free verse) by sliver

. In a stand of aspens We print poetry Mocking mother nature With silent souls we shout weaknesses Previously unparalleled As honey and dew drips quietly from silent tongues Leaves of every color litter the ground Still, unaware of our surroundings We unwittingly spit on the history Of souls stained like ours Straining against powers We could never comprehend Still silent In this peaceful mountain land

Dovina 1-May-05/4:47 PM
I am not getting how the printing of poetry mocks mother nature here in the aspens. And how do we shout weaknesses that are previously unparalleled (unshouted or unfelt)?

Incomplete sentence: "As honey and dew drips quietly from silent tongues."

Aspen leaves are yellow in the fall, so how do leaves of every color litter the ground?

But like Mulberry says, the next lines are good.

Sorry, I'm picky today.




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