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the solitary tree (Free verse) by bamf909

a solitary tree stands firm in a field of wheat, where amber waves of grain display yellow cowardice, waving in the wind. the upright tree stands tall, stiff, unmoving, until, sudden storms approach, electrifying everything- a crackling calm, but then, thunder shakes and showers render heaven's lightning a fiery flare, cinders fly then sparks are out, amid a toppled tree once elegant, now on its knees. the only tree in a field of waking dreams may be struck down, and yet, it seems that blackened stump still stands above the bowing heads of wheat.

Dovina 22-Apr-05/10:20 AM
You have missed my point. You called the amber waves cowardly. That's telling us something unsubstanciated by anything you said previously. And amber waves of grain is a cliche. The opinions and images in your comment are not in your poem. the poem jabs us with things after you have already said them, making us feel belittled. What you think about cowardice is alright, but how you say it is not.




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