Goad22 Apr 2005

Since my comment is a double entendre, and stays, on the surface, entirely within your own metaphor, in order to parse it as a double entendre you had to first recognize that your own words were a (apparently unintentional but obvious enough that everyone I've shown this "pome" to has immediately snickered) double entendre.

That was the point of my comment.

In other words, it WAS constructive criticism and your not recognizing it as such is your own failing. It was pointing out that your poem immediately fails as a whole because of a glaringly obvious double entendre. A common pitfall, actually.

If you ever managed to get your writing to a level where real writers would consider letting you be part of a real writing workshop, you would very quickly find out that "constructive criticism" has nothing at all to do with the little wet dream you have of a group of people patting you on your back for your cleverness and stroking your metaphorical genitals in loving adoration of your brilliance.