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15 Minute poem (Free verse) by Damien

Hello my loyal readers are you enjoying my bleapers Are my grammatical terms cheaper than flea keepers Or are you impressed by the way I appear to write Do you cheer my fight to help the fame in sight Yes thats right you are the only beings You can kick off my career or cause my fleeing Either way what I say will be the same regardless You cannot control the thoughts I believe are heartless Nor can you critisize someone who looks to fly We people just want to help you scale new heights I do not know how rare we are within this world Plus I am confused That I may lose what I unfurl And yes I know this looks like I think I'me a god But I'me not obviously we are all the same from the off So cause my fall or spark my rise Either way I look, its just through your eyes

Goad 18-Apr-05/2:51 PM
Well, even though your grammar's terrible, you do certainly know how to rhyme. Many of the lines not only rhyme on the ends but have rhymes inside them! With all the breathtaking double rhymes I was getting my hopes up for a triple rhyme before the end...but perhaps you'll pull that off in your next opus.




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