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Listless Nights (Other) by blindwriter

Beneath expanses plaited through the sky A silence curdles darkness gone awry A blanket whistles twists and curls Behind a mural of sulfur pearls The silence catches fire A notion billows higher Salty air descends upon the coal-ringed port Black riders hurdle comets through the air for sport Gripped without suspense a million eyes Watchful, even as the starlight dies Passed over the hand That turned out the land The pounding of a gallop over night-devoured grass The resonance that turns the earth with shards of glass Turn back the clock recount your sacred seconds The hour strikes as midnight beckons The eerie ails endless Friend falls friendless Faint sounds meander helplessly, lost and never found A glimmer of light expands and is struck again to the ground Without these promised memories, a half-dead sun will die Beneath expanses plaited through a pearly, silent sky A stolen remorse severed A bleeding sky remembered.

blindwriter 4-Apr-05/4:24 AM
Thanks.
I have been trying to attain a certain level of abstract and visonarianism...but I don't seem to be able to manage. Probably not super enough to attempt the impossible.
You're right about turbid. Will take your advice and try something a little simpler and easier to grasp.
As for this poem, it was an experiment with a general tone, there really is no meaning...a slight parallel maybe...but no beginning or end.




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