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another poem to a friend (Free verse) by that_funny_girl

I think that perhaps my friend we are kindred spirits or at least I hope so because wouldn’t that be nice. As long as we are going to experience the pains of life its nice if even two out of three or one out of five can be said to have happened to others? I feel your pain my friend or at least I try. The internet is funny how it lets people be whoever they want to be. Yet it is the one and only medium where people can let their true selves show to people who won’t judge them on who they are. I feel that you and I are letting our true shades show at least most of the time. Which is so nice because it can be tiring you know, to always were a mask three shades lighter than what you feel or even three shades darker than what you want to feel. I realize this is not so much about you than about me talking to you but to be frank, I’m not so good at this type of poem. And I hope this will make you happy - because when my friends are happy so am I. And you are one of my really good friends now. I love you in a friend of all friends type of way . . . I hope you get what I’m saying. You are good on the inside I say no matter what you act like as you go through your daily life. Keep talking to me I say I like it.

thepinkbunnyofdoom 3-Apr-05/6:27 PM
I hope he is reading. I really do. I had the misfortune of thinking you'd have improved and this was a rewrite. If your going to write, entertain the notion that anyone can read what you write(Not just your Aim Buddy).

I'm hate giving out zeros, because I know I'm not a big fan of recieving them, but not only is this an improperly tagged pimple, you actually call it a poem(Once in the title and then once again in the body). Let me ask you, what do you think a poem is? Random line breaks and the outpouring of every thought inside your head over one subject? The closest this got to being a poem was your talk of mask and shades, but it doesn't out weigh the rest of this bulk. Not to mention its poorly done.

*The Most Cliche Advice Ever*
Don't preach about your feelings
Paint them so that others can see them

<3 Jason




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