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LucidRevelation
The rhythm of my breath beats in sync to the swirls of smoke that curl around your face. This makes me weak and needy I envy the smoke that curls around your face in the exact rhythm of my breath. Undisrupted and undecided.
Christof
30-Aug-02/8:41 AM
very good. I like the way the alternating long/short lines reflect the breathing and the sensuality of the smoke. Not that i condone such a revolting habit. Just say no, kids.
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