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she is... (Free verse) by Sapphire

of earth and spice, had carried in on wind crisp of air and orbs, sky blue tinged apple cheeks with flesh begging to be bitten flamed ropes falling over shoulders, i'm smitten

<~> 30-Aug-02/7:57 AM
she sounds tempting and delicious. i don't think you need 'had' in the first line.




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