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Sleep does my eyes (Free verse) by nentwined

sleep dep my eyes rolled (back) and slammed (back) down (to forwards...) dripping water mindfold wraps around: a ker-(chief); a ker-(osene rag).. . cold (before it burns). lucid blankness of passing (time) fades into the out of the (into) and into (time) passing by; bye-bye black sheep of the counting: counting sheep the passing (of the mind) as it (passes by) the time (as it fades) into sleep; sleep does my eyes, (lids down) up (down) UP! sliding down without connection: sleep does my eyes as the sleep (dep) does me... does me (tucked) into warm blankets of muffled thoughts of muffled thoughts of...

nentwined 7-Mar-05/4:23 PM
I'm glad it does. I like to find a trickling, bouncing, burbling rhythm in everything. Dance, really. But dance is music. :)




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