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Hunger (Free verse) by Dovina

(Imagine a single line of text in a circle that you have to turn as you read - the word “Hunger” at the center. You can’t determine where to start, so start reading anywhere.) I am hungry You present me a plate of food Sensations arise I see food, smell it, anticipate eating it Volition comes into use I pick up utensils I indulge in the pleasure of eating As my stomach fills, desire decreases My mind turns to other desires New sensations Mental formulations arise

richa 21-Feb-05/8:35 AM
and stop bitching all the time about critics. It takes a lot more effort to try and communicate to you what is wrong with your poems and why such a thing is wrong (as you will not accept even the most central of poetetic tenets) than it does to simply say: Ace Dovina, and everyone's opinion is equally valid so if you think 'show don't tell' is wrong you don't even have to make a cogent argument why.




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