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Hunger (Free verse) by Dovina

(Imagine a single line of text in a circle that you have to turn as you read - the word “Hunger” at the center. You can’t determine where to start, so start reading anywhere.) I am hungry You present me a plate of food Sensations arise I see food, smell it, anticipate eating it Volition comes into use I pick up utensils I indulge in the pleasure of eating As my stomach fills, desire decreases My mind turns to other desires New sensations Mental formulations arise

Dovina 21-Feb-05/7:36 AM
The commas might be needed when it’s put in a circle, just to let a person know where to pause, also to prevent DgB from diddling with it. In the format shown here, you’re probably right.




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