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Kiss of a rose (Other) by backstreetdreamer

I was slain by a rose with the sword of the night, there is no defence when the arrow's in flight. With the shield of a rainbow reflected in me, my destiny beckoned my heart to be free. But the chains of the rose are a permanent bond, and her thorns a reminder of what lies beyond. I surrendered my heart and the fire in my soul, for the love of the rose Is forever my goal. For the smile of the rose I would give of my all, and the scent of the rose Is my destiny's call...

Dovina 12-Feb-05/8:06 AM
A lot of vague attempts at imagery here that are not developed. Some seem there only for rhyme and rhythm. The cadance is good, but I miss finding any strong point to it all.




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