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Lust, and the Sad Soul (Free verse) by woodstock20000

Lust. It seems that all the world's a lust. "Oh, if it were not a mortal sin, to make one's Love a God and worship it." Woe to you, Giovanni. For the body is lost, but the soul even more so. It shudders in its own imortality. For its weekness would last forever. Does it not, as it wanders, to and fro along this God forsaken place? Perhaps.

zodiac 7-Feb-05/12:43 AM
You mean "It shudders in its own immortality." And "its" in the next line, too.

"wonders" should be "wanders". And you can't wander "along" a place. You can wander along a promenade, the bank of a winding creek, or nearly anything else commonly understood as having length. A "place" does not.




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