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Girly (Free verse) by Dovina

Fingernails long clicking keys wrong until polish dries words can’t fly rubbing itchy eye mascara’s a dye hair flussed and curly but had to rise early sushi with chopsticks redo lipstick but I’m better off girly than poetess, surely this poem of mine won't seem to rhyme

Dan garcia-Black 6-Feb-05/9:57 AM
I really like this poem. It is very light-hearted with much sarcasm. I believe the last four lines would be better re-arranged as follows:

"but I’m better off girly
than a poetess, surely
this poem of mine
doesn't seem to rhyme"
It puts the heavy-handed "girly conclusion" inside the poem and makes the end a "typically girly" comment(in the sacastic sense in which you write about the subject of girliness).




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